So who want to proofread a paper of mine??

[CRX-YEM]

Well this is the last paper I will ever have to write and I was hoping someone that is a better writer than I might be able to give me some tips etc....

It need to be grammatically correct and reflect a level of college writing. It's basically an exit interview. If I don't get a passing grade I don't get to graduate this semester so if anyone would like to help me out I'd greatly appreciate it.

I've attached the word doc. Thanks in advance

 

[corvetteguy78]

Well this is the last paper I will ever have to write and I was hoping someone that is a better writer than I might be able to give me some tips etc....

It need to be grammatically correct and reflect a level of college writing. It's basically an exit interview. If I don't get a passing grade I don't get to graduate this semester so if anyone would like to help me out I'd greatly appreciate it.

I've attached the word doc. Thanks in advance

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Overall I think it's a well written paper, though I am no enlgish or grammer buff.

 

[CRX-YEM]

Thanks for the feedback

 

[klyph]

When do you need it by?
I excel at correcting grammar and restructuring sentences to make the thoughts more coherent.

 

[klyph]

Your typeface changes in several places as does the font size.

Also, it reads like: "I did this, I did that, Then I did this, I think I wanted I have..." It makes it hard to stay interested. changing the wording to avoid repetition will go a long way to making it more readable. I started to reword sentences, but then realized most of the paper is I, I, I.
If you want I can give a shot at going through it, but it might take me a while.

 

[CRX-YEM]

If you have nothing else better to do that would be a great help.